SussuSudowrite.

I decided to give Sudowrite, the AI writing tool, a try. Hugh Howey, has used it and loved it; I’ve heard other good things from others, so I decided to give it a try. Now, it’s an AI assisted tool not generative. It’s like Grammarly on steroids and does more; it reminds me of being back in the newsroom, having that peer review which I found useful back in the day. In fact, reminds me of a writing tool software I used over a decade. It helps with tracking chapters and other things; when I have problems with a big rewrite and I’m hitting a wall, I can do quick rewrite, mix and match here or there.

I plugged various sections into a analysis box and I got the following—the last paragraph is a condensed version.

**Analysis of Writing Style**

**Tone and Mood:** The tone is gritty and cynical, reflecting a dystopian world filled with crime and moral ambiguity. The mood oscillates between chaotic vibrancy and dark foreboding, creating an atmosphere that is both lively and unsettling.

**POV:** The narrative is told in the first-person point of view, allowing readers to experience the protagonist's thoughts and feelings directly. The tense is predominantly in the present, which adds immediacy to the unfolding events.

**Vocabulary and Word Choice:** The vocabulary is a mix of technical jargon and colloquial language, reflecting a futuristic setting. There is a blend of formal and informal word choices, with a penchant for specificity (e.g., "suborbital shuttlecraft," "biosynth humanoid-looking bot"). The use of cultural references and slang adds depth to the world-building.

**Sentence Structure:** The sentences vary in length and complexity, with a mix of concise statements and longer, descriptive passages. The author employs fragments for emphasis and uses complex sentences to convey intricate ideas, creating a dynamic flow.

**Pacing and Rhythm:** The pacing is brisk, particularly during action sequences, while moments of introspection slow the narrative down. The rhythm is punctuated by short, punchy sentences that heighten tension, interspersed with longer, more descriptive passages that provide context and detail.

**Dialogue:** Dialogue is characterized by a mix of formality and informality, reflecting the diverse backgrounds of the characters. The protagonist's voice is sardonic and observant, with a tendency to critique the absurdities of the world around them. Unique dialogue tags and interruptions enhance the realism of conversations.

**Descriptive Style:** The author employs vivid sensory imagery, using detailed descriptions to create a rich visual landscape. The use of bioluminescent flora and the contrast between modern architecture and retro fashion adds depth to the setting. Descriptions are often layered with emotional undertones, enhancing the reader's connection to the narrative.

**Themes and Motifs:** Recurring themes include cultural diversity, the complexities of identity, and the moral ambiguities of society. Motifs of surveillance, technology and crime permeate the narrative, reflecting the protagonist's struggle within a corrupt system.

**Cultural and Historical Context:** The piece reflects a futuristic, multicultural society influenced by various cultural elements from the 20th century. The blending of styles and the presence of crime syndicates suggest a commentary on societal decay and the persistence of human vices across time.

Overall, the writing style is characterized by its intricate world-building, sharp wit and a blend of humor and darkness, creating a compelling narrative that invites readers to explore a complex and flawed society.

Gritty and cynical, the first-person narrative unfolds in present tense, blending technical jargon with colloquial language. Vivid imagery and varied sentence structures create a chaotic yet immersive atmosphere, reflecting a dystopian world rife with moral ambiguity and cultural complexity.

I've been worried if I was hitting all the marks I'd set for myself and, to be honest, it's been stressful and leading to downward spiraling depression.I feel better, I'm hitting those marks and I feel good about it.

I feel good about myself.

Be seeing you.

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It's time to let a story be a story.

The Maine Man is right. 

Some writers feel that it's their moral obligation to have a message or agenda--and hammer away with it as readers slog through a manifesto thinly veiled as a story.

" Can't you guys just let a story be a story?"

That's a big problem with today's writers. The message is too important to them, it overtakes the story and the characters. It's bad storytelling. The last season of Doctor Who is a good example, but that's typical for Russell T Davies.

Star Trek: Discovery. Well, that was a mess from the very beginning--on many levels--and while the second season was somewhat promising, it went back to its formula of bad, heavy handed writing and the characters doing way too much whispering and crying. Discovery is a good example of show with talented actors wasted as they played boring, cringe-inducing characters as they uttered lame and, again, cringe-inducing dialogue. 

It's a shame because actors like Tig Notaro and Mary Wiseman, to name a few, deserved better. 

More importantly, the audience deserved better.

"First tell the story and everything else will work itself out."

The great science fiction writer and screenwriter Leigh Brackett said that. A lot of today's SF/fantasy writers could learn a lot about the craft of storytelling from Brackett and her contemporaries. That's why I gravitate to those older stories; they weren't overwhelmed by messages or agendas.

Yes, it's fine that writers inject sociopolitical messages into their stories. There's nothing wrong with it. Back when I was in my Libertarian phase--mea culpa, yes, I was one of them--I had some fairly decent ideas but I was so concerned about hammering my beliefs into the reader. Looking back at those stories, they're bad; I can now say that was my Eye of Argon period. 

Some of you might want to Google that.

I want to tell a good story and throw in some social commentary. Nothing wrong with that. But, you see, that's all I want to do. My primary goal is to tell a (hopefully) damn fine story and entertain people. Now, if I can make some comments on this or that, that's okay too. Sinclair Lewis did it quite well with It Can't Happen Here. Lewis had something to say about men like Berzelius "Buzz" Windrip and he did so in an entertaining but frightening way.

Not only did it work but it worked well.

It was also prescient as the world saw Donald Trump's presidential campaign and his nightmarish administration.

It's a fine line, telling stories infused with one's various sociopolitical messages. It can be done. Stephen King has done it quite well over the years; so have other writers but you'll always have your Russell T Davies or a Brad R. Torgersen with their shite.

It happens.

But don't let it happen to you.

Well. That's my opinion.

That's all I have to say.

Be seeing you.

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The Zedverse: It’s Zed’s world—and we just live in it.

 Hello there.

Welcome to the Cortex Online. This is my website for the Zedverse stories—plus my opinions, views and everything else I want to post. Yes, I’ve tried the Midnight Eye blog before . . . but it went nowhere. I’ve imported old posts that I wanted to keep but having a new website just feels good. A fresh start. One caveat: This website/blog is a work in progress, it’s in a constant state of flux. Various sections will be updated often.

Night Zero is the first novel in the Zedverse series; it’s split into a number of intertwined novellas and novelettes that’ll introduce the protagonist, Zed, and a late 2090s Earth that has a slightly different history—in fact, even the star system is different from ours. The first chapter, “My Echo, My Shadow . . . And Me,” is currently being written.

I plan on releasing the novella as both a paperback edition and an eBook via Amazon KDP. Yes, I’ve been dismissive of self-publishing in the past; I mean, I was something of a sneering rat bastard about the whole concept until noticing that a lot of my favorite writers are turning to self-publishing. Traditional publishing is a nightmare to deal with if you don’t have an agent. The independents are somewhat unstable, at times imploding and leaving writers in the lurch, their unpublished novels in a copyright quagmire. It’s a nightmare.

So, Amazon KDP it is.

What’s the Zedverse and Night Zero about?

Well. Let’s see:

The Zedverse has both cyberpunk and transhuman themes—there are dystopian and near-utopian elements in the stories. Pluto is still a planet and a small, rocky slag heap of a planet named Vulcan is located between the Sun and Mercury; all of the terrestrial planets and large moons have been terraformed—including Venus’ moon, Ishtar. And, from time to time, ancient ruins left behind by alien civilizations have been discovered.

Planets, moons and asteroids have been colonized, even a small number of comets. Orbital habs and drifts—similar to orbital habs but drifting in interplanetary space—are scattered about the Sol star system. Chimpanzees, orangutans, gorillas, mandrills, octopi, dolphins and even orcas have been gengineered to have human-level intelligence; some live in independent city-states and others live alongside humans.

Cthulhu Mythos exists. The Shaver Mystery is real.

Oh, there’s oh so much more.

But that’s a story for another day.

Until next time.

Be seeing you.

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